Wednesday, November 9, 2011

Could someone please read my personal essay? Thanks a load, any criticism is very helpful :)?

It's well written. My only question is what's the purpose or goal of the piece exactly? It's clearly not a travelogue, too much about you for that. Is it a piece on personal reawakening/spiritual discovery? That's what it seems closest to, but if so, it's missing the bit at the end where you resolve to incorporate nature back into your life or some such.

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